| Testy Copy Editors http://www.testycopyeditors.org/phpBB3/ |
|
| Warning! http://www.testycopyeditors.org/phpBB3/viewtopic.php?f=5&t=4748 |
Page 1 of 1 |
| Author: | Phillip Blanchard [ Sun Jun 26, 2005 4:09 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Warning! |
Post Magazine sends eight writers to RFK to cover one randomly chosen night of baseball. A Tale of Nine Innings It was the best of seats, it was the worst of seats, it was brilliant pitching, it was abysmal pitching, it was an evening of darkness, it was the spring of hope . . . |
|
| Author: | Matthew Grieco [ Sun Jun 26, 2005 4:45 pm ] |
| Post subject: | |
Wow. Years of coming to this site have inured me to bad writing for the most part, but I literally felt my stomach convulse at this one. |
|
| Author: | Wabberjocky [ Sun Jun 26, 2005 5:59 pm ] |
| Post subject: | |
Reminds me of Daniel Okrent's baseball classic, "Nine Innings," except without the writing flair, organizational skill or narrative cohesion. |
|
| Author: | Wabberjocky [ Sun Jun 26, 2005 6:03 pm ] |
| Post subject: | |
But baseball is woven into summer like the stuttering of sprinklers or the imprint of a lawn chair on your back. More unifying than the filibuster, more reliable than the real estate boom, baseball has quickly become -- once again -- part of Washington culture. One beauty of baseball is the pastoral tempo, the lulls and lacunae, the moments when a fan might relax, exhale and simply enjoy the beauty of twilight, or the graceful flight of a bird on the wing, far below you. With all those writers on the clock, I'm guessing the editors were given the day off. |
|
| Author: | Wayne Countryman [ Mon Jun 27, 2005 12:34 am ] |
| Post subject: | |
After reading the first few grafs I figured this wasn't a story for fans. After reading a few more I couldn't imagine it appealing to many non-fans either. The story sets up scenes with actions that go unexplained, as if it had been cut sloppily. Editing to fix my mistake: Another sign that this story might not have been edited carefully: The second baseman playing here for the Brewers against the Nats hit a home run for the Nats today against the Blue Jays. Did I miss that trade? Yes, I did miss that trade. Spivey was traded to the Nationals two weeks ago. E-me. But it would have been nice for the story to point this out. What kind of deadlines does this section have? |
|
| Page 1 of 1 | All times are UTC - 5 hours |
| Powered by phpBB © 2000, 2002, 2005, 2007 phpBB Group http://www.phpbb.com/ |
|