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Author: | Wayne Countryman [ Tue Jun 01, 2010 12:22 am ] |
Post subject: | Edited by Rupert? |
WSJ's Knuckle Princess: CHICO, Calif.—Ivan Ochoa, a former infielder with the San Francisco Giants and now lead-off hitter for the Tijuana Cimarrones, never faced a pitcher quite like Eri Yoshida before. For one thing, the former Japanese minor-leaguer is just 18 years old. For another, the pitcher is a she. In his first at bat on Saturday, faced with an unpredictable knuckleball, Mr. Ochoa settled for a bunt—a light hit without swinging the bat, and typically a safe way to get on base. ... So, in a story about a small, young, female professional pitcher we get a lousy definition of a bunt (on the sports page!) And guess what's not explained: knuckleball. I'm not saying it should be, but then why stop the second graf to define bunt? |
Author: | fev [ Tue Jun 01, 2010 8:35 am ] |
Post subject: | Re: Edited by Rupert? |
"Typically a safe way to get on base," eh? |
Author: | Editer [ Tue Jun 01, 2010 11:17 am ] |
Post subject: | Re: Edited by Rupert? |
"For another, the pitcher is a she -- a member of a gender typically smaller and less athletically adept than ordinary baseball players." |
Author: | Wayne Countryman [ Tue Jun 01, 2010 4:56 pm ] |
Post subject: | Re: Edited by Rupert? |
Yup -- just about every sentence of the story is, um, off base. I started with the muffed bunt explanation just because of the recent post about first pitches. Most bunts do NOT result in a hit. Most modern-day players do not find bunting to be easy. But thanks for the nut graf about her being a woman. |
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