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majorbabs	Post subject: Better or worse? Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2004 4:21 pm
Joined: Tue Apr 09, 2002 12:01 am Posts: 744 Location: HuskerLand	Original sentence about very young students in a science class, who put leaves and grass and maybe part of a soda can in small clear plastic jars and watch how the items decay -- or don't decay -- over time: "They put items in clear plastic jars to learn about how they decay"<p>Edited sentence: "They watch items decay in plastic jars."<p>Admittedly, the first sentence needs work but I think the second sentence loses the point, even though it's shorter and tighter. TCE comments?
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Matthew Grieco	Post subject: Re: Better or worse? Posted: Thu Jun 03, 2004 4:56 pm
Joined: Mon Mar 10, 2003 1:01 am Posts: 2266 Location: New Jersey	Worse, for the reasons you state.<p>I would propose:<p>"They put items in plastic jars to observe how they decay."
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