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 Post subject: Well, there was this train ....
PostPosted: Thu Apr 22, 2004 11:47 pm 
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[I]The accident apparently resembled a disaster in Iran on Feb. 18, when runaway train cars carrying fuel and chemicals derailed, setting off explosions that destroyed five villages. At least 200 people were killed. ... [I]<p>... AP reported deep in a story about the rail accident in North Korea, after several paragraphs that made it clear than no one has any idea what happened.


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 Post subject: Re: Well, there was this train ....
PostPosted: Fri Apr 23, 2004 12:01 am 
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(c) 2004, The Washington Post
TOKYO, April 23 - A massive explosion at a railroad station in North Korea on Thursday reportedly killed and injured hundreds, possibly thousands, of people, destroyed homes, administrative buildings and spewed debris for miles, according to U.S. and South Korean officials.
<p>Geez, that's rough. Each casualty is not only dead but wounded on top of that.<p>Make it "killed or injured," but save the "and." It's needed later in the sentence, although its exact placement depends on whether "spewed debris" was really "destroyed," as the story would have us believe.<p>
---<p>[ April 23, 2004: Message edited by: SeaRaven ]</p>


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 Post subject: Re: Well, there was this train ....
PostPosted: Wed Apr 28, 2004 12:14 am 
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<blockquote><font size="1" face="TImes, TimesNR, serif">quote:</font><hr> I know North Korea's a fair-sized lump of real estate, but is the lid really so tight that no one knows where this happened?<hr></blockquote>
Everyone knew where it happened -- Ryongchon, near the Chinese border -- but it wasn't worth putting in the lead of this story, since few American readers have recently vacationed there.
What's happening in North Korea is important to our lives, since the regime there is both reckless and nuclear-armed. The fact that they won't let Western reporters into their country should not force American journalists to ignore news events there.
I am impatient with people who complain that the news from North Korea is so scant and second-hand. We could make it a lot more believeable by soft-peddling the weak sourcing and just pretending that we're sure what's happening there. Cautious sourcing is honesty. The story is important. Let's accept the fact that there's no film footage and Kim Jong Il won't be on "Larry King" tonight.<p>[ April 28, 2004: Message edited by: ShiningPath ]<p>[ April 28, 2004: Message edited by: ShiningPath ]</p>


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