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PostPosted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 4:48 am 
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Alberto and Jasmine are 16-year-old sweethearts, or were until that day in November when Jasmine, who planned to be a virgin until marriage, learned in the halls of DeWitt Clinton High School in the Bronx that Alberto was "messing around."<p>She raged, she wept and she broke up with him. He apologized, he cried and she took him back. Then she suggested they cut school and have sex — "to keep him," she explained tearfully.<p>It could have been one of the oldest stories in the book, except for the real-life ending: Alberto said no.<p>Though he is just one teenager — short and freckled, with close-cropped kinky hair, a Hispanic surname and an electric smile — his personal decision speaks to the underlying causes of an extraordinary demographic shift. (New York Times)<p>***No, it doesn't.***


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PostPosted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 4:52 am 
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Toby, lanky and talkative, counts five partners since he lost his virginity in the seventh grade, with a girl his own age: 12. "I wasn't stupid," he insisted. "We did it correctly. We used a condom."<p>***Stop it. Stop it now.***


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PostPosted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 4:54 am 
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Alberto's favorite class was sex education. One day last fall, he teased Jasmine by saying he wished he were still a sperm inside his father, and that "me and my stupid self would not never have swum up the long tunnel and swam toward the mysterious, great white ball."<p>***Parents, tell your kids: Don't talk to reporters!***


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PostPosted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 4:57 am 
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Twelve years ago, when Alberto and Jasmine were children, ....<p>***Uh, they're still children.***


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PostPosted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 4:58 am 
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"From the ground up," Mr. Furstenberg said, "kids are getting quite different signals from the signals that were there 25 years ago."<p>***No, they're not.***


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PostPosted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 10:36 am 
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Please stop.


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<blockquote><font size="1" face="TImes, TimesNR, serif">quote:</font><hr>Originally posted by blanp:
...he teased Jasmine by saying he wished he were still a sperm inside his father, and that "me and my stupid self would not never have swum up the long tunnel and swam toward the mysterious, great white ball."<p>***Parents, tell your kids: Don't talk to reporters!***<hr></blockquote><p>Actually, there is a good lesson in this idiotic bit of "reportage." Unless it is a politician, of course, there is no obligation to use a quote that makes someone look like a moron. Especially a kid. This quote adds nothing to the story whatsoever.


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PostPosted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 11:48 am 
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Stories about teens' answers to surveys about sex or drugs have little or no basis in reality.<p>This is a work of quasi-fiction. It might as well be Uli in the Outback. Can't wait for the corrections and clarifications this week.


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And, of course, this paragraph of the "trend" story could have been written in any decade, going back to whenever, by simply changing the genre of music: <p>
But these teenagers cannot escape mixed messages about sex, or the complications of deciding if, when and how to sample it. They are picking from a new multiple-choice menu, where virginity and oral sex can coexist and erotic rap makes the case for condoms. And between the lines, they are feeling all the old emotional conflicts: jealousy, ambition, loneliness, love.


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PostPosted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 12:32 pm 
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However, with teen pregnancy at its lowest recorded level, you guys will admit that there is a story there, right? Just that it should have been written better?


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PostPosted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 3:10 pm 
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I agree that the available figures indicate a trend but it's pretty much impossible to supplement the figures with reliable anecdotes. (By available figures, of course, I mean the numbers on pregnancies, live births and abortions, not the results of "sex surveys," which, as jjmoney62 reminded us, are worthless.)


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PostPosted: Sun Mar 07, 2004 4:30 pm 
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When asking a teenage boy how many sex partners he has had, rule of thumb is to divide by 5.


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I guess it's a series.<p>And another thing: You can't identify someone in a story by a partial name (presumably to protect her "privacy," and then run her picture. It's ridiculous.


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PostPosted: Mon Mar 08, 2004 2:22 am 
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The average teenage girl has a nearly 90 percent chance of getting pregnant during a year when she is having sex without contraception, a study by the Alan Guttmacher Institute shows - a rate that condoms cut to 15 percent and the most effective birth control methods reduce to less than one in 200. <p>***Let's think about that for a while.***


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<blockquote><font size="1" face="TImes, TimesNR, serif">quote:</font><hr>Originally posted by blanp:
I guess it's a series.<p>And another thing: You can't identify someone in a story by a partial name (presumably to protect her "privacy," and then run her picture. It's ridiculous.<hr></blockquote><p>The Times did that? Oooooh boy. Did they use her full name in the cutline?


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<blockquote><font size="1" face="TImes, TimesNR, serif">quote:</font><hr>Originally posted by Jackie:
<p>The Times did that? Oooooh boy. Did they use her full name in the cutline?<hr></blockquote><p>No.


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