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 Post subject: Flagging fuzzy writing
PostPosted: Tue Sep 23, 2003 2:32 pm 
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I'm gearing up to do a workshop on plain words for a group of local union editors. I'm trying to compile a shortlist of words that flag "fuzzy writing ahead."
To me "issues" is one such. It crops up in phrases such as "health and safety issues" where it should be "bad air and faulty wiring."
Any of you folks have similar flag words? I'd appreciate the list either here, or directly to me at kfitzrandolph@opseu.org . Thanks.<p>[Edited to add e-mail link.--PB]<p>[ September 23, 2003: Message edited by: blanp ]</p>


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 Post subject: Re: Flagging fuzzy writing
PostPosted: Tue Sep 23, 2003 10:19 pm 
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"There are" bugs me, such as: "There are 10 people in the group" when "Ten people are in the group" is much stronger.<p>"Event." I hate this word! "The event is scheduled for the end of time." Just call it what it is... concert, fund-raiser, orgy, whatever.<p>"Decided to." "After four years of being in prison, Joe Schmoe decided to liberate himself by sawing through the bars." Is his decision the interesting thing? No? Well then, why not: "After four years of being in prison, Joe Schmoe liberated himself by sawing through the bars." <p>(If after four years, Schmoe decided to become a woman, well, I'd probably leave it in there.)<p>*
Don't know if that's what you were looking for, but those are some things I've seen in the past 45 minutes. Thought I'd share my pain.


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 Post subject: Re: Flagging fuzzy writing
PostPosted: Wed Sep 24, 2003 8:31 am 
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Yep. That's the sort of thing I am looking for all right.


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 Post subject: Re: Flagging fuzzy writing
PostPosted: Wed Sep 24, 2003 1:40 pm 
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addressed their concerns, or voiced their concerns, expressed his approval, ... aaargh!!!!!


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 Post subject: Re: Flagging fuzzy writing
PostPosted: Wed Sep 24, 2003 2:35 pm 
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I've got two: youth and pre-planning.<p>I don't believe anyone really uses "youth" in normal language. (Particularly those who've seen "My Cousin Vinnie.") "Yes, my daughter is out with one of the youth from the college." No. No. No. Call them teenagers, children, young Texans, high-schoolers, bobby-soxers or whatever but not "youth" unless you want fuzzy writing.<p>And will someone tell me what the difference is between planning and pre-planning? None. So let's ban it.<p>So there's my two.


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 Post subject: Re: Flagging fuzzy writing
PostPosted: Wed Sep 24, 2003 4:34 pm 
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Pointless abstract nouns. <p>"thunderstorm activity" sted "thunderstorms"
"decontamination process" sted "decontamination"
"political arena" sted "politics"
"was an enjoyable experience" sted "was fun"
etc., etc., <p>Activity, Arena, Basis, Character, Concept, Effect, Experience, Focus, Function, Impact, Issue, Level, Manner, Nature, Process, Sector, etc., etc.


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 Post subject: Re: Flagging fuzzy writing
PostPosted: Wed Sep 24, 2003 9:03 pm 
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Here's another I just fixed:<p>"The event (GRRRR!) is happening on the campus of Somebig University."<p>The fix:
"The rally is at Somebig University." If it's at the university, it's gotta be on the campus.<p>[ September 24, 2003: Message edited by: Hawkeye ]</p>


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